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Late bloomer
       you're wrapped 'round the trellises
       of little European towns.

Night owl
       you drift easily into the centre
       like an enchanted child unseen.

Morning nymph
       you cause commotion, then motion
       then sighs and screams and moans.
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*prettyflour Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A critique for you! :)

I am a fan of short poems- works that use just a few words to say a lot. This poem is a classic example of what I like. Short and sweet.

I love the way you use 'round instead of around. It gives a nice sleek flow that captured my interest immediately.

You got some great imagery going on- the way you described the night owl and the morning nymph was just... lovely.

This has a magical feel to it, especially the last stanza. Speaking of the last stanza... that last line was really interesting- it gave a touch of... evil with the screams and moans.

Another thing that I like is that there is a certain...vague quality to your words. You don't spell everything out, but give little clues and vivid imagery to set your scene. It makes the reader think, it's short enough to give me some instant gratification but still leaves me wondering.

Overall, I think you've done a really nice job with this. It's original and creative. It will leave an impact on readers. Well done!
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Thanks for the critique!
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*prettyflour Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. It was my pleasure!
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Mood: Love ~kjh1019 Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
i love the morning nymph
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